Fallout 2 mod Fallout Sonora 1.15 and Sonora Dayglow 1.15 Vanilla Translation

FCAdmin.msg: Mine Administrator

{255}{}{The mine is infested with giant rats. They're munching on workers and gnawing our gear. First, off the rat king's gotta go - it's the biggest threat.}
"First, off" -> "First off,"

{263}{}{Wherever they are! Get it? Don't ask me! Checked those endless scrapyards you passed by?}
Instead of "Checked those ... ?", either "Have you checked those ... ?" or "Maybe check those ... ." or just "Check those ... ."

{205}{}{(changes tone) Okay, okay, let's not get carried away! The caravan men won't respect me much if I show up all battered... (to himself) Where do they find these people...}
"(to himself)" could be "(muttering)" (minor)

{298}{}{Anything I can pitch in with?}
"Anything I can do to pitch in?"


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FCBarmen.msg: bartender

{345}{}{Well, I'll be damned. Thought these old flags were lone gone. You've got a deal. I'll trade this carbine for the Arizona flag. It's in good condition, but ammo's scarce around here. Deal?}
"lone gone" -> "long gone"

{405}{}{I knnew you couldn't be trusted. Clear out of my bar.}
"knnew" -> "knew"

{436}{}{Their probably just drunk or something. I'll tan their hides like pig rats if they made me go there for nothing.}
"Their probably" -> "They're probably"

{243}{}{Too steep for me. Maybe next time, in the future, some other day.}
"Maybe next time, in the future, some other day" says the same thing three times. Perhaps just "Maybe next time."

{231}{}{Quick tip: watch your tongue. The workforce's a mix of cons and peons. Some serving time, others paying off debts. Sure, there are indentured savages, but we call 'em servants, not slaves.}
{232}{}{Why keep ex-cons on lockdown?}
It's unusual to say "con" except in the phrase "ex-con". "convicts" or "criminals" might be better. Also "in custody" sounds better than "on lockdown" to me.

{244}{}{Off to a good start. Folks'll appreciate it. Just remember - drinking alone won't earn you a rep around here.}
Another translation I'm referencing implies that should be "Just remember – a single drink won't earn you much goodwill." If we're keeping "rep", it probably needs to be "good rep" or "bad rep" since by default I would say without qualifiers "rep" has mildly negative implications by itself.

{270}{}{What's on the trading menu today?}
{271}{}{Alcohol and snacks, my friend. What else do you expect to find in a bar? Although sometimes I gotta play the role of a whole darn store.}
"trading menu" is odd. Either "what's on the menu?" (leaning into the fact that it's a bar) or jsut "What are you selling today?"

{285}{}{Ah, there was a bit of a trade "hiccup". If you're not a fan of the prices, well, good luck finding another watering hole in this city. Spoiler alert: there ain't one.}
I'm not quite sure which line this is a response to, but the first sentence is awkward. "Ah, what's the hold up?" might work.

{367}{}{Whoa! You really beat the game! Here, this drinks on me. You've earned it after all that tension.}
I get that he's talking about the performance being stressful/tense, but "You've earned it after that performance." reads a bit better.

{407}{}{Bad news. The mine boss is dead. Mine's a mess right now.}
{408}{}{Damn... that's rough. He was a good customer for those meals. Hope the new boss keeps up the tradition. Keep the lunch as payment.}
"mine boss" sounds like Kagan, but I'm pretty sure these lines are talking about the administor, which might fit the text better. "He was a good customer for those meals" could be "He bought lunch from me almost every day." or "He almost kept me in business single-handedly."


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FCBarTlk.msg:{223}{}{Here's some nuclear beer. Not fancy, but it'll keep the conversation flowing, right?}
Should "nuclear beer" be "Nuka Cola"?

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FCBishop.msg: Preacher Hiram

{256}{}{The majority of settlers hold reverence for the Holy Fire, or at least feign as much. However, Faber's mercenaries are largely faithless, and skepticism pervades within the populace. Fear not; the Holy Fire shall eventually illumine their minds. My apprehension lies with those who strike out against its wisdom.}
"skepticism pervades within the populace" might be better as "skepticism pervades throughout the populace" or just "prevades the populace"


{319}{}{Festus's son became a source of discord. I pleaded to send the gifted youth for temple teachings, but Festus adamantly refused. Sadly, in Flagstaff, many fail to recognize the value of knowledge, relying instead on brute force.}
"I pleaded to send the gifted youth" -> "I pleaded with him to send the gifted youth" sounds a bit better to me

{365}{}{Your 'principles'' could turn public opinion against you.}
"Your 'principles' could turn public opinion against you."

{416}{}{So it's done. For... Vengence? What a barbaric motive! But if the church is gone, then I'll discard the preacher's robe and leave Flagstaff. Your actions grant me the chance for a fresh start. Perhaps it's not all bad.}
"Vengence" -> "Vengeance"

{404}{}{Greetings. I'm glad to see a fellow believer in our monastery. Welcome to radiant Flagstaff!}
{1404}{}{Greetings. I'm glad to see a fellow believer in our monastery. Welcome to radiant Flagstaff!}
This is the only time the Bishop mentions that this a "monestary" (rather than "church" or "temple"). Might consider changing for consistency

{406}{}{For our faith, distance is inconsequential. The messengers of the Renaissance have informed me of your rise.}
"Renaissance" -> "Rebirth", I think?

{413}{}{I blew up the Temple of Fire. It brought tragedy to the Villa, so I taste the same fate.}
{1413}{}{I blew up the Temple of Fire. It brought tragedy to the Villa, so I taste the same fate.}
I think "so I taste the same fate" should be the opposite: "so I gave it a taste of the same fate."

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FCBoss.msg: Faber

{261}{}{Aright...}
"Alright..."

{283}{}{Several patrols have gone missing in the city ruins to the east. People say they heard gunfire. Find out what going on and eliminate the problem - I'll pay you 300 caps.}
"what going on" -> "what's going on"

{200}{}{(looks you over, as if evaluating your worth) I haven't seen you before. Who the hell are you?}
{1200}{}{Pardon my ignorance, but a lady shouldn't be wandering in such places without an escort. I haven't seen you before. Where are you from?}
"Pardon my ignorance" is odd—what is he apologizing for? Perhaps just drop this phrase, or "Pardon me for being forward,"

{202}{}{Hmph? It's been a while since someone dared talk back to me. All those who did, well, they're dead now. I'll give you a minute for your courage. I'm curious to hear you out.}
Consider "I'll give you a minute for your courage" -> "Your courage has earned you one minute of my time."

{205}{}{I'm looking for my people, the villagers from Villa. They say they're in your pen.}
"They say" sounds like the villagers are saying that. Perhaps "I'm told they're in your pen."

{219}{}{That's all, I'll be going.}
Perhaps "I'll be going" -> "I'm leaving" or "I'll be going now"

{220}{}{Is that all? A minute of talking will cost you 100 caps.}
Perhaps "One minute of conversation will cost" or just "Access to the pen will cost", since I don't think the minute is enforced

{224}{}{No problem. My guards will let you in and out... if you behave.}
Consider moving ellipsis to make it sound more threatening:
"No problem. My guards will let you in... and out, if you behave."

{226}{}{I don't have that many caps. Just give us a minute!}
"us" -> "me", or "Just give us a minute to talk!". Perhaps a better flow would be "Just let me in!"

{231}{}{What kind of labor are we talking about?}
{232}{}{Mining for uranium ore here, working caravans to the south, rebuilding Flagstaff, sometimes we get orders from Phoenix... Can't remember them all.}
"them" doesn't conjugate with "kind of labor". Perhaps "Can't remember everything." Also consider "Mining for uranium ore here" -> "Mining uranium ore"

{234}{}{Until recently, it was. Half the scum in our colony got caught by lawmen in the southern lands. Then they were brought here. Raiders, rapists, card debtors - we'll find uses for everyone.}
"Half the scum in our colony got caught by lawmen" -> "Half the scum in our colony were caught by lawmen" to match "were" in the next sentence.

{240}{}{A savage like you has a narrow view of things. Do you know about the cities to the south? True civilization is reviving there. Like in the old days.}
"True civilization is reviving there" -> "A true civilization is being revived there."

{242}{}{Flagstaff supplies uranium, and our prisoners are the main workforce in this chain. Without us, there'd be no progress in the south. We're making history, and now your pathetic village can be part of it. You'll do something useful for the rest of the world.}
"the main workforce in this chain" sounds like a mixed up metaphor. Perhaps "the main link in this chain."

{249}{}{There are a few buyers in the south. Most of our goods used to be bought by the Church of the Holy Fire. Now it's a bit trickier with clients.}
"Now it's a bit trickier with clients." -> "Now it's a bit trickier to find clients."

{255}{}{Alright, let's make a deal. There are a few problems that need solving. Do that, and I'll release your fellow peasants that remain in the pen.}
Consider "Do that, and I'll release your fellow peasants that remain in the pen." -> "Solve my problems, and I'll release your fellow peasants."

{260}{}{What the hell are you talking about?! The mine is ruined, and it'll take months to clear it! Does that sound like solving problems? No. Now get the hell out!}
"Does that sound like solving problems?"

{271}{}{Well... the villagers are sick. Can't you see?}
"Can't you see?" -> "Haven't you noticed?" or "Isn't it obvious?"

{278}{}{(yells) You rat bastard, do you even realize that a handful of filthy peasants are putting the whole of Flagstaff at risk! Years of hard work establishing and controlling an entire town, the hopes of the entire south for prosperity - all of it down the brahmin's ass. Come on, time to show me what you're fuckin' made of!}
"You rat bastard, do you even realize that a handful of filthy peasants are putting the whole of Flagstaff at risk!" Not quite sure what he's getting at. Perhaps "You rat bastard, you and a handful of filthy peasants have put the whole of Flagstaff at risk!"

{288}{}{The ruins of the old city are too difficult and dangerous. I'd lose more people if I sent them in. But now I have you... What's wrong? Having second thoughts already?}
Consider "What's wrong? Having second thoughts already?" -> "What's wrong? Having second thoughts?

{306}{}{There was a ranger saboteur in the ruins, but he's already left Flagstaff.}
{307}{}{Ranger? Unexpected, yet not a big surprise. I had a feeling we'd have trouble with those narrow-minded lawmen sooner or later.}
"Ranger?" -> "A ranger?". "Unexpected, yet not a big surprise" sounds somewhat contradictory. Perhaps "Unfortunate, but not unexpected."

{315}{}{God damn... if you're fuckin' me around, it'll cost you your life. Get your peasant friends out of here before I change my mind.}
Consider "if you're fuckin' me around." "if you're fuckin' around with me."

{317}{}{Hard to believe a peasant could solve all these problems. Even more perplexing is your diligence. Your people have been free for a while now.}
{1317}{}{Hard to believe a peasant woman could solve all these problems. Even more perplexing is your diligence. Your people have been free for a while now.}
Maybe "doggedness" instead of "dilligence"? Or reword "It's even more perplexing to me that you're helping us after your people were already freed."

{321}{}{You're just a sick bastard. Time to put an end to you!}
Maybe "You're a sick bastard. Time to put an end to you!"

{333}{}{Wait... What are you saying? We recently got a batch of slaves from the Villa. Are you from there? No wonder they left you at home - even a shovel is too much for an idiot like you.}
"the Villa" -> "Villa" (unless he's being purposefully wrong)

{344}{}{I'm an honored member of the Brotherhood of Steel. And I demand: release these innocent villagers, or the Brotherhood will bring its wrath down on you.}
"And I demand: release these innocent villagers" -> "And I demand the release of these innocent villagers" (colon is a bit strange here)

{345}{}{Pff. Is everyone in your Brotherhood so pompous? Fine. But why the sudden change? You were the ones who demanded maintaining the labour supply by any means necessary.}
"labour" -> "labor" to match rest of dialog(s)

{353}{}{But he's not just beating them, he's injuring them. And for no serious reason.}
maybe "maiming" or "crippling" instead of "injuring" to be clear what the problem is

{356}{}{I'm not liking the sound of this. I put Lash in charge of maintaining order, relying on his firmness. If he's really going overboard, I won't let it slide. Workers are too expensive to waste so carelessly.}
Perhaps "I put Lash in charge of maintaining order, relying on his firmness." -> "I rely on Lash's firm hand to maintain order."

{362}{}{...Alright. I'm not against getting rid of Lash. It'll be amusing to see one warden replace another. Though, I still don't get why you care.}
Lash isn't the warden, he's the overseer. "warden" -> "overseer"

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FSCmpSlv.msg: Faber's computer

{215}{}{A group of prisoners from Villa disappeared in the mine. Either I underestimated these hicks, or our defenses are inadequate. We must enforce stricter punishments.}
Not wrong, but "or our security is inadequate" feels more accurate for a prison.

{223}{}{When I created this colony, I hoped to realize the New World idea. But visitors only care about caps. Dirty bastards, I'll enforce new laws and make them change!}
"I hoped to realize the New World idea" -> "I hoped to bring about a New World" (or "create").

This one is a bit odd to me, since I thought the "New World" was Church of the Fire thing... Does/did Kagan believe in that?

FCCrvBos.msg

{213}{}{If your lookin' for business, we can't help you. We only work with the administration of this mine.}
"If your" -> "If you're"
"We only work with the administration of this mine. -> "We only work with the mine administration." maybe also drop "administration"

{226}{}{The largest city I know of. You'll find everything there that can be found in the Wasteland, but you need to be careful. The city is not safe, ever since the fire worshippers took over.}
"The city is not safe ever since the fire worshippers took over." (comma splice)

{229}{}{Strange folks. They worship pre-war atomic energy - that's all I understand. Too many words to take in. But they don't sit idle either - it was under their control that Phoenix became a real city.}
Maybe "Strange folks. They worship pre-war atomic energy - they use too many words to understand any more than that. But they aren't just talk - it was under their control that Phoenix became a real city."

{233}{}{Everyone who has good old nuclear-powered equipment. But the fire worshippers in Phoenix buy the uranium first and then sell it to smaller buyers at five times the price.}
"The fire worshippers in Phoenix buy uranium in bulk and sell it to smaller buyers for five times the price."

{235}{}{It does... if you eat it for breakfast, lunch, and dinner. This ore is slightly radioactive and harmless until it's in the reactor. Then it's better to stay as far away as possible.}
"This ore is slightly radioactive..." -> "This ore is only slightly radioactive..."

{241}{}{With your leaky pockets, you can't even hope for road dust.}
I'm not sure what this means

{258}{}{You're caravanners. Do you really care who you work for?}
{259}{}{Others cared who we worked for. Because of our connections with the fire worshippers and Faber's mercenaries, not everyone will want to deal with us. Our competitors were always jealous. Setting up new routes is going to be very difficult. If it's even possible.}
"Others cared who we worked for" -> "No, but others shut as hell/fuck do." (adding some emotion to the line, since thier business is ruined)
"Because of our connections with the fire worshippers and Faber's mercenaries, not everyone will want to deal with us" -> "Working with the fire worshippers and Faber's mercs didn't exactly make us popular, and our competitors were always envious of our position." (emotion here is envy more so than jealousy)

{260}{}{So you're not heading out at all?}
{261}{}{Exactly. Until the situation improves, we'll have to stay in Flagstaff. I don't know what we'll do yet, but we'll figure something out.}
"So you're not leaving?" or "So you're not going to try to set up a new deal elsewhere?"

{304}{}{Phoenix doesn't offer a warm welcome, just a short drop and a sudden stop. We're still figuring out our next move.}
"just a short drop and a sudden stop" I think might be referencing a noose based on another translation. Perhaps
"There's nothing for us in Phoenix except a noose dangling from a lamppost."

{335}{}{I had a few quesitons before we head out.}
"quesitons" -> "questions"


In general, I feel like the dialog for the caravan boss could use a few more clipped verbs if that's his style of speaking, perhaps:
{252}{}{You don't know what's been going on? The mine is out of business, and so are we.}
"You don't know what's been goin' on? The mine is out of business, and so are we.

{237}{}{Are you talking about Faber and his mercenaries? I don't care. Me and my people need work. And the colony provides jobs and stable income. That's enough for me.}
"Are you talkin' about Faber and his mercenaries?"

{250}{}{...I'm telling you, we're not going anywhere... Wait, you're not from the administration, are you? Then forget it.}
"...I'm tellin' you, we're not going anywhere..."

{400}{}{We're stopping here for a day. Feel free to explore, but remember, the caravan won't wait if you're late.}
"We're stoppin' here for a day."

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FCCrvMan.msg:{114}{}{Every trade trip could be your last.}
Perhaps "Every [trade] convoy could be your last." (or "journey")

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FCCtznB.msg (late night church defacer)

{212}{}{What's your take on the Cult of the Holy Fire?}
"What's your take on the Church of the Holy Fire?" since "cult" implies a negative take that the PC might not have. Also adds more impact to the response ("I never liked that cult.")

{215}{}{Yeah... if you bribe him with a bunch of caps and then listen to his idiotic ramblings. I can spout that nonsense about radiation, X-rays, and atoms for free. The whole Church of the Holy Fire is full of charlatans who only help for hefty donations.}
"I can spout that nonsense about " -> "I can spout nonsense about " or "I could spout that nonsense about " reads a bit better

{221}{}{If you offer me some incentive, I'll rid the city of the preacher.}
"If you offer me some incentive" is a tad stilted. I think the meaning here might be "If you can provide a good reason, I'll rid the city of the preacher.", since the response is about how the church condoned the attack on Villa. But I'm not certain.


{232}{}{Not if you pretend you sympathize with the cult now.}
"cult" -> "church" for similar reasons (could go either way on this one)
"Not if you pretend you sympathize with the cult now." -> "Not if you pretend you now sympathize with the cult."

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FCFarmA.msg

{219}{}{Because then I'd have to give them almost all of my harvest for ten years. Those are the conditions. But my farm can only feed a couple of people, no more.}
"Those are the conditions." -> "Those are the terms." (minor)

{315}{}{This land started to bear fruit only thanks to our sweat and blood! I put in too much work to give it to some thieves. They'll leave someday anyway.}
"I put in too much work to give it to some thieves." -> "I put in too much work to lose it to some thieves." (minor)
"They'll leave someday anyway." -> "They'll leave some day anyway." (which is a bit odd to me… he's just planning on waiting them out?

{317}{}{(confused) Morrison... Never mind. This sign is probably a hundred years old. Now *I* own this land!})
"This sign" -> "That sign" (minor)

{319}{}{They lived here before us. Savages, that is. They didn't adapt to the new life, but they learned to rob. The garrison guards brought out almost everyone, but this gang turned out to be too tenacious.}
"The garrison guards brought out almost everyone". "brought out" doesn't quite parse. Perhaps "drove out" or "took out"

{320}{}{You didn't mention that.}
{321}{}{Why? Listen, they are simple raiders. They come and take what doesn't belong to them. Nothing else matters.}
"Why?" -> "Why would I?"


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FCFarmB.msg

{203}{}{[Defend]}
Perhaps "[Defend]" -> "[Defend yourself]"

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FCMadre.msg Madre in the pen

{105}{}{Your madre has died. You need to find other members of the Villa.}
"You need to find other members of the Villa." -> "You need to find other members of your tribe." (at least, remove "the")

{217}{}{Nothing special, don't worry. Mostly, I did the same household chores as in the Villa. Only more and harder. These colonists are so... grim. The men were made to work in the mine. They've really had it tough.}
"the Villa" -> "Villa"
Perhaps "Only more and harder." -> "Only more, and they were much harder."

{225}{}{Faber has released all of you. It's time to return to the Villa.}
"the Villa" -> "Villa"

{227}{}{I'll see you back at the Villa, madre.}
"the Villa" -> "Villa"

{239}{}{The only ones who might be able to help are the Rangers. Their base is south of the Villa, on the Colorado River. But don't rush to beg them for help. The Rangers don't offer their protection for free.}
"the Villa" -> "Villa"

Hmm, taking a more expansive look, there are dozens of references to "the Villa". It seems like most of the references in the script omit "the", treating "Villa" akin to a city name, but there are many of "The Villa" too, mostly (but not merely) among Villa residents (would might naturally be saying "the village" in spanish). I don't have a strong opinion here, but might need a bit of thought.


{200}{}{? How did you... For heaven's sake, you shouldn't have taken such a risk! We would have found a way back to Villa... But of course, I'm so happy to see you. How proud your padre would be to know of the determination by his child! You've done well.}
"How proud your padre would be to know of the determination by his child" -> "How proud your padre would be to know of his child's determination!" or more pithily "Your padre would be proud of the grit you have shown."


{212}{}{So happy to see you.}
Seems pretty causal for the circumstances. perhaps "I'm so happy to see you!"


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FCMer.msg Mercenary from Villa, also while he's your companion

{231}{}{Ah, the wasteland has finally taken its toll on you. Spare me the unnecessary bruises on my fists - vanish!}
"Vanish!" seems too formal for the merc. maybe "Scram!"

{300}{}{Answer some pointless questions.}
Why would the PC consider the questions be pointless if he's asking them? This is the route into "companion" questions like "what weapons are you skilled with?", so it's a bit perplexing. Initially I thought it was just 4th-wall breaking cheekiness, but the rest of the script doesn't really match that tone.

{244}{}{It's time we parted ways. You're free to go.}
Minor, but this read to me like it's possible that he's stop being your companion permanently if you choose this option. Perhaps "It's time we parted ways. Wait for me here."

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FCMinBrk.msg

{228}{}{Good point. They say that before creating the colony, Faber brought in some guys who repaired and setup the equipment. Only after that did he bring people here and start production. None of the locals could have done this.}
"setup" -> "set up"

{257}{}{What? Are you serious? You'd kill a man for a handful of prisoners? Even the mercenaries in the garrison aren't that bloodthirsty. And a worse tyrant would probably take Lash's place. Any way, don't involve me in this. I have nothing to do with it!}
"Any way" -> "Anyway"

{253}{}{I don't know why I'm telling you this, but Lash forces him to rewrite reports, claiming the imprisoned workers were caught in a landslide or injured themselves. He doesn't want to tarnish his reputation. But he also keeps the administrator under his thumb.}
Perhaps "rewrite reports" -> "fabricate reports" and drop "imprisoned"

Suggested rewrite: "I don't know why I'm telling you this, but Lash also keeps the administrator under his thumb. Lash forces him to fabricate reports that claim workers are caught in landslides or were injured in accidents. He doesn't want the full extent of his brutality to be known."

FCMinGrd.msg

{205}{}{Silence! What are you doing, you piece of shit? Want to be sent to hard labor? I'll make you die on your feet! You'll eat dirt and drink your own urine! Is that clear?}
"I'll make you die on your feet!" (?) -> "I'll strike you down where you stand!"

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FCPost Anne Brandley

{200}{}{(you see a woman in an unusually decent outfit; she seems to take care of herself and looks down on those around her)}
"looks down" -> "look down" for conjugation. Honestly, this seems like a little much. "she seems to take care of herself" is redundant with knowing she's spiffily dressed.
suggestion: "(you see a smartly dressed woman with a supercilious air)"

{205}{}{(looks disdainfully) Hmm. Good afternoon. Where were you taught to talk to ladies like that? In a corn field?}
"looks disdainfully" -> "looks/glances at you disdainfully"

{212}{}{Let's go back to the beginning of the conversation.}
This is part of the control flow when answering questions about herself or Sonora Express. It feels a bit too clunky. Maybe "There's something else I want to ask you about."

{218}{}{Thanks for the rescue! It was a dangerous situation. In gratitude, I'm gonna give you a big discount if our transportation services are needed.}
"gonna" seems too colloquial for Mrs. Brandley. "In gratitude, I'll give you a big discount on our transportation services, should you ever need them."

{227}{}{(stumbling over every word, she draws up the contract and writes your name in the journal) Thank you for choosing our company. The package will be waiting at its destination.}
"Thank you for choosing (The) Sonora Express." reads a bit better to me.

{288}{}{Children? I can't believe it! Residents have always valued Flagstaff for its safety, with the garrison nearby and the impassable wall of barricades. And yet, the thieves were inside, not outside. And children too!}
"Residents have always valued Flagstaff for its safety, with the garrison nearby and the impassable wall of barricades" -> "People live in Flagstaff because it is safe from outside threats." or "... because it's one of the safest places in the wasteland."

{303}{}{We deliver small packages, transfers, and letters. For larger shipments, there's another company that works with the uranium mine.}
Perhaps "Larger shipments, like uranium from the mine, is usually instead transported by dedicated caravans."

{310}{}{Previously, along the route, there were only wolves and occasional tribes; the highwaymen had nothing to raid. Now, Flagstaff attracts people and caravans looking to earn money.}
Perhaps "There used to be nothing to raid on the route aside from the odd tribal. Now, ..."

{325}{}{It's a large but stifling city where competition prevents business to expand. There, I lacked freedom, and security.}
Perhaps "It's a large city but my business was stifled by cutthroat competition. There, I lacked freedom and security."
(This line is a bit odd since there is a branch of Sonora Express in Phoenix... were they competitors?)

{331}{}{Well, they grew out of a gang of slave traders a long while back. Now, they're like a small army, protecting the city, with their own 'general' and all, like in those pre-war stories. However, you probably haven't read much.}
"However, you probably haven't read much." -> "Not that I would expect *you* to have read them." (fits in with her snobbery)