Vault 12 comic - The Forum Thread

Discussion in 'Fan Art/Fan Fiction' started by xulm, Sep 27, 2007.

  1. xulm

    xulm V12 comic guy

    138
    Jun 1, 2006


    Hello!
    After all that time I can finally start publishing my comic - I even fit in the Fallout's 10th anniversary time - let it begin!
    The Vault 12 comic will be updated every friday, since today.

    It all starts with the page number 1 - the prologue, the introduction or whatever You want it to call.

    Comic's website: xulm.nma-fallout.com

    Bon appetit!


    PS: Special thanks to Silencer for proofreading! Thanks!
     
  2. xulm

    xulm V12 comic guy

    138
    Jun 1, 2006
  3. Sorrow

    Sorrow So Old I'm Losing Radiation Signs

    Feb 9, 2006
    Great :D . I love your drawing style :D . And the characters :) .
     
  4. fallout ranger

    fallout ranger Vault Dweller

    783
    Sep 18, 2004
    Very good, I like it alot.
     
  5. mr. pastorius

    mr. pastorius A Smooth-Skin

    690
    Aug 26, 2006
    Your style is awesome, I love how you handle the little details (the cigarette in the first panel, for example).

    Great work.
     
  6. fallout ranger

    fallout ranger Vault Dweller

    783
    Sep 18, 2004
    I like the monotone colors, it makes you feel the coldness of the vault.
     
  7. Ah-Teen

    Ah-Teen Vault Senior Citizen
    Orderite

    Jun 21, 2007
    YOU rock!
     
  8. SuAside

    SuAside Testament to the ghoul lifespan
    Admin

    May 27, 2004
    nice style, though i dont quite get the point of the story (yet). :)
     
  9. Brother None

    Brother None This ghoul has seen it all
    Staff Member Admin Orderite

    Apr 3, 2003
    Nice contextless exposition you got going there. wth?

    Style-points, tho'
     
  10. Carib FMJ

    Carib FMJ Nuka-Cola Chaser

    Nov 8, 2003
    Nice... Nice work. Ah, Vault life, and I always did wonder about smoking in the Vault.
     
  11. alec

    alec White heterosexual male Orderite

    May 21, 2003
    Niiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiice! :ok:
    Your style is awesome. Single colour works wonders.
    Stylistically this is a great job. I'm waiting for the contents to evolve into something... mind-blowing.
     
  12. Briosafreak

    Briosafreak Lived Through the Heat Death

    Dec 18, 2003
    Great, very unique visual sense, I like it :ok:
     
  13. Silencer

    Silencer Night Watchman Staff Member Admin

    Nov 7, 2003
    They should have had an event scripted in Fallout 1 whereas if you had smoked in the Vault 13, you would cause the water supplies to be reduced by 25 days :P
     
  14. xulm

    xulm V12 comic guy

    138
    Jun 1, 2006
  15. Carib FMJ

    Carib FMJ Nuka-Cola Chaser

    Nov 8, 2003
    Good stuff Xulm. Good stuff.
     
  16. Sorrow

    Sorrow So Old I'm Losing Radiation Signs

    Feb 9, 2006
    Great :D . Grim and Radioacive :D .
     
  17. SuAside

    SuAside Testament to the ghoul lifespan
    Admin

    May 27, 2004
    magazines?

    while correct, i kinda feel you shouldve used another word there...
     
  18. xulm

    xulm V12 comic guy

    138
    Jun 1, 2006
    hmmm, SuAside, You're right!

    I just fixed it.
     
  19. Wooz

    Wooz Vault Sweeper Admin Orderite

    May 18, 2003
    Xulm, it's "Radiation" not "Irradiation"
     
  20. quietfanatic

    quietfanatic Ancient One

    Dec 10, 2003
    Good stuff.

    But if we want to talk about proofreading the English again, for the latest page, some changes could include, "radiation" (irradiation is fine though actually), cutting half the Dr's commas, "is Doctor","You know just as well as I do what will happen", "not permitted", "mention FEV", "a virus you've", "their own research", "in one hour/within the hour".

    I can help out with proofreading if you want xulm. I have quite a bit of experience doing that sort of thing. Do you type your drafts or write straight onto a sketch version? My editing procedure usually involves revisions via Microsoft Word using the tracked changes and comment functions. I would be a little worried that I might not always have the time and might interfere with your story, but would otherwise be happy to assist.