Fallout: A Post-Nuclear Apocalyptic Novel

Discussion in 'Fan Art/Fan Fiction' started by BigBoss, May 11, 2014.

  1. BigBoss

    BigBoss Your Local Scrub

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    Dec 24, 2012
    Thanks man. Always appreciate the support, opinions (whether good or bad), and even suggestions. A writer that doesn't take their fans suggestions in thought screws themselves in the long run (won't mention any names.... Dark Tower series).

    Also, what do you think about backing my book NMA? :deal:
    If it weren't for the legal ramifications that would ensue from Bethesda, I might have sold this after I finish (of course, giving the members of NMA who signed up to a list a free copy).
     
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  2. Sduibek

    Sduibek Creator of Fallout Fixt Moderator Modder

    Oct 27, 2010
    I think questions of backing would go to @Brother None or @Per right? I forget who's "in charge" these days, with BN working on/with WL2 team.
     
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  3. BigBoss

    BigBoss Your Local Scrub

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    Dec 24, 2012
    Nah it was a joke. I don't want anybodies name's, slogan's, or advertisement on this book. This book belongs to Fallout fans.

    Made by Fallout fans, for Fallout fans.

    Technically, Odin is in charge but I don't think he's taken so much as a peek at the site in months. I really wish Miroslav was back. I mean not because Odin's a bad leader, I don't even know the guy. But just because Miroslav was a cool dude. I had a long conversation with the guy right before he handed the website over (this was before I ever signed up to NMA in 07 back with my old account that I abandoned/lost the password too).
     
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  4. Byzantine

    Byzantine Sink me in the ocean.

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    Sep 4, 2014



    I've just downloaded your first three chapters, but can't promise you when I'll be able to get through them all. I'll be sure to send a message (and maybe a rad or too) your way once I do, though. Skimming through some passages, it already looks quite promising.
     
  5. valcik

    valcik So Old I'm Losing Radiation Signs

    Dec 20, 2008
    I'll take the liberty to express my opinion then! :smile:

    After reading through the first three chapters, I'd say that writing in third-person narrative style would be much better than the first-person style you've chosen. Can't explain why, perhaps it's because those third-person style written characters leaves much more place for author to mess with them in a nasty ways when there's not that tight and very personal bound between author and his character, but those stories told through a fictional hero are much more interesting to me for reading. (Charles Bukowski and his autobiographic stories told through that Chinaski duder are good examples for what I mean.)

    Needles to say, I do not criticize you or the quality of your text in any way! This is just my very own personal preference, just like any other person does prefer something different in movies, games and any other media. Keep up the good work!

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    Also, I don't think that going the KS way with this would be a good idea. There's a lot of texts taken directly from the game - Overseer's lines, for instance. Beth could sue your pants off for that. ^^
     
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  6. Akratus

    Akratus Bleep bloop.

    May 14, 2011
    Yes, for a Fallout novelization I would also probably have picked 3rd person, rather than my usually preferred 1st person. I think one shouldn't get too into the character's mind, or get too specific with him at all, considering he's a blank slate in the game. Of course that only works to an extent.
     
  7. Byzantine

    Byzantine Sink me in the ocean.

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    Sep 4, 2014
    @BigBoss, your story so far is a very good read, and I hope you keep adding to the chapters. However, I do have some thoughts.

    Personally, I feel as if you're being overly descriptive in certain parts of the narrative. In your first chapter, for example, you've provided quite a lot of detail about your protagonist's sleeping quarters than what's necessary to establish the setting. Also, you seem to be fairly descriptive in terms of some of the characters' physical appearances in the same regard, too; the reader is given little prompt to use their imagination to visualise the ambience as well as the people the narrator encounters throughout the desert, and I feel that reducing the amount of written detail to perhaps one or two brief sentences would help to encouage this. Otherwise, you have a great skill in creating fertile grounds for character development, as well as creating realistic dialogue and internal voices. It's apparent that you've drawn inspiration from your own personal experiences, in that regard.

    I hope my insights have been helpful in your future writing, and hope that you see your novel to its conclusion. It looks like you're on a creative roll, and it's been a pleasure to read.
     
  8. BigBoss

    BigBoss Your Local Scrub

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    Dec 24, 2012
    Yeah, I get what you mean. I can always experiment in Chapter 4 this way and see how people like it.

    And yeah; the novel is still under construction thought it gets hard for me to find the free-time to sit down for more than an hour and just write. So far I've never encountered serious writers block either, though.
     
  9. Akratus

    Akratus Bleep bloop.

    May 14, 2011
    In Alec's art thread, you asked for a book cover. So I messed around in Photoshop and Illustrator for a bit.


    I thought I'd go for a slightly simple, minimalist look.
     
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  10. BigBoss

    BigBoss Your Local Scrub

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    Dec 24, 2012
    Ok firs t I just want to let people know that I'm still alive, and to expect the next chapter by the fourth.

    Second, I read all of your opinions and take them into deep consideration, though for those who've suggested the story in third person, I'm sorry but for two reasons I've chosen to forego this. First I've established a bit of a personal connection with our protagonist, which my mentor explained can be a bad thing, se one it's too late to turn back.

    Third, I didn't get to see your book cover akratus, would you mind reposting it?

    Forth, I'd like to explain my absence. My phone carrier stopped allowing me to connect to the internet through my PC, so I must wait until I get paid pin the first to reconnect... Thus I've only been able to get on the net with my phone, explaining my absence.

    As a more personal note note, I've been reading other books to gain knowledge from other writers, as I have much to learn. This one book I'm reading, Artgas: Rise of the Loch King has a great basis for story teliing, but too much romance for my enjoyment. Any of you who know anything about me know that I've suffered my own romantic problem with my loved one Kate, which has led to loneliness for me, which is why I hate anything romantic, as it brings up negative feelings and reminds me of my own loneliness. But this is not the point. What I'm asking is, would you like to see more romance in the novel, particularly of the story I've developed between Jason and Kate (you can guess where I got the name)? I was planning on letting.g the reader know why Kate left our protagonist, but would you guys like to see more of their story, which would bring romance into the novel? Let me know.

    Sorry for the typos, but as I said I'm on a phone.
     
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  11. alec

    alec White heterosexual male Orderite

    May 21, 2003
    I think you should only add a romantic backstory if you think it's going to be functional. I do some writing myself and I only ever add a sentence to a story when it'll do any of these two things:
    [1] further the action
    [2] add to character development
    If it doesn't do any of that, the sentence has to go.

    If you think a romantic backstory would shed some light on the behaviour of one of the main characters in the story you are writing, adding an extra layer, clarifying things the reader should know to understand the story, then you should do it for it'll make for a more interesting character and a deeper story. If a romantic backstory will only divert attention from what's really going on, if it's a backstory that isn't necessary to understand all the finesses of your novel, then dump it and forget about it.

    Just think about all the action movies out there that have a romantic element in them. I don't know about you, but most of the time, when the romance kicks in, I'll just sigh out loud and think something along the lines of 'jesus, just fuck her and get it over with, mister macho man, you've got criminals to catch'. In fact, I'd be hard pressed to come up with the title of an action movie that had a romantic twist that didn't make me gag. It's why Band of Brothers is better than The Pacific: if I'm watching a series about WW2, I want to see soldiers, trenches, tanks, and bayonets, not the love interests of said soldiers.

    My two cents, bro.

    Also: fuck Kate. :wink:
     
  12. Sduibek

    Sduibek Creator of Fallout Fixt Moderator Modder

    Oct 27, 2010
    Is it healthy to name the character Kate? We don't want this endeavor to be painful for you :(
     
  13. BigBoss

    BigBoss Your Local Scrub

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    Dec 24, 2012
    EDIT: books coming along great, I'm in the middle of Jason and Ian's visit to the Khan camp.

    EDIT 2: EDIT everythings fixed, books back on.
     
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  14. Akratus

    Akratus Bleep bloop.

    May 14, 2011
    Don't have the file over here, once I get home I'll update this post.
     
  15. BigBoss

    BigBoss Your Local Scrub

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    Dec 24, 2012
    Got it. I'll make it quick and painless for the reader then.

    Off topic, I remember I was watching The Pacific with one of my friends and her boyfriend who was British and came to live here while he went to college or some shit. We watched a few episodes of Band of Brothers and the Pacific back to back with a few other guys and their girls (I was the only dumbass with no date) because it was kind of like movie night or what the hell ever they want to call it, but all he did was talk shit about the US and US Soldiers throughout the whole goddamn thing. It kind of turned me off from both series, because now I hear that dickhead's voice and annoying British midlands accent every time I watch it.

    Back on topic, Akratus, what happened?
     
  16. Akratus

    Akratus Bleep bloop.

    May 14, 2011

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  17. BigBoss

    BigBoss Your Local Scrub

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    Dec 24, 2012
    Looks good man. Check the front page.

    Here's a little sneak peak inside the fourth chapter:

     
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  18. BigBoss

    BigBoss Your Local Scrub

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    Dec 24, 2012
    Ok guys, work on the novel has resumed.

    There is a new update on the page in the NEW section, which I would also like you guys to check out if you have the time. Also, sorry for the double post.
     
  19. Sn1p3r187

    Sn1p3r187 Carolinian Shaolin Monk

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    Apr 7, 2014
    Awww man. you got my support on this. How far along are you and can I see the book cover? When do you think you'll have it published?
     
  20. BigBoss

    BigBoss Your Local Scrub

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    Dec 24, 2012
    The book cover is posted up on the first page. It's there that you can read the chapters (for free), see the Q&A's, and the News section.

    So far, I'm working of the fourth chapter, which I've started today. As of now, there's no finish date for the entire book, since I'm not even close. The fourth chapter will tell of Jason entering the Khan camp. But yeah, check the front page for any information you want to know about man, including to read the book.